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Content: Let me just say, I really hope that your content isn't always in the style of your title. You don't Do tHiS in your entries (most titles are like that though) but there's still internet talk, and in some entries all you have is a list of what you have to do or have been doing. But at least you talked more about tryouts, and delved a little deeper. I thought this entry was going to be full of emotions because it seemed you really wanted to make it and it happened! But you didn't even write what they had you do, or explain about the costs (like, I don't know why they would charge that much) or anything! Okay, this got your anger out and it was pretty detailed, but I don't like reading something that has soo much profanity. Is it neccessary to use those kinds of words twenty or so times to get your point across?
For the most part, I glanced through your entries because you didn't get me interested. It kind of seems like you ramble on and on, even if it's something that remotely catches my attention, like wanting a boyfriend and being single for so long, after a second or two you go off on another topic. And it doesn't make it easier that you don't capitalize or use correct punctuation. For some people, I don't mind, it seems to suit them, etc, but I don't know, it bothered me here. Maybe the font's too small and especially when there's a long paragraph, I just think, I have to read that!? Oh yay, you've used capitals in here so good job on that, and it makes it a little better, but for some reason it still isn't easier to read. It may be that the lines are too close together.
I know people think University is higher than college, but that's not always the case. There are some excellent 4-year colleges (they're just smaller) out there. It all depends on what you want to study and the kind of atmosphere you like. It's not the end of the world if you get one bad grade. Colleges/Universities look at SAT scores (yup, another thing to worry about), the essay (a pretty good amount if weight is placed on this), community service, involvement in school activities including sports, work experience, and I suggest you take some classes at the junior college to get ahead a little. As of now (will be going to UC Santa Cruz in the fall), I have about 30 transferable credits from the local peninsula college, and many of them will cover general education classes.
A lot of the time you just write something, and skip onto another thing. You don't dwell or linger or a particular topic too often. Though in some entries, paragraphs were quite intense. It took me awhile to get through this entry. It's easy to make one humongous paragraph for you, but please remember to use breaks. When I read through it, I saw it was a lot of information and you were putting everything that happened in the argument which is good. That's something I like to see. I'm sorry you had to go through all of that. I haven't tried to put details of family arguments in my own diary yet; it's just too painful.
I'm glad you wrote this entry. It makes me laugh that someone thinks Asians cheat like that. I cannot believe someone would say "a lot of Asians cheat, blah blah blah" Actually, it's usually the oppposite. I'm still blown away by this.. It's inconceivable to me that teachers think only Asians cheat. How completely lame.
I'm sorry you had that review encounter but seriously, the layout score wasn't bad at all (hello, you got a 26 out of 30; even though the reviewer didn't like the person, she still gave you a lot. And from what you wrote, I thought you'd gotten a 30 as your total score, or something!) But you're right, reviews should be done in good fun and giving opinion that is respectful. Personally, I don't think that review was all that rude, but you have the right to your thoughts on it. And I hate to break it to you, but 27 years old is living significantly longer than many on Diaryland. (18/40).
Layout: Wow, there's a lot going on in this layout by Lissy Designs. I'm not sure where to start, but I like the font for the lyrics and Aaliyah's name. The pink brushes and stars are beautiful too, but maybe too many stars, and this is weird: I see three lines of squares on the left side, then bigger squares with little ones underneath on the right side. So I didn't like those.
And the picture is good, but so small in proportion to the rest of the page.. Since it's like that, the emphasis is on the pink brushes and the link. Then, your navigation.. Well that's a little better. I like the [x] next to each link. Though underneath that, is In Memory, what you're feeling and About you-- those are okay to put there but please don't tYpE iT lIkE tHiS... Doesn't it get tiring for you? And besides that, it's kind of hard to read and actually makes me want to not read it! At least your currently is typed normally. It's definitely much better like that. I like the Plug idea, but the link to Special Revu's doesn't work so you might want to check that.
Another thing I didn't like was the title and time/date written: I think it would look better centered on top of entries. Also, in your current entry, there's no link to next, only before. But at least all your other entries have both links. Uh-oh, sweetie, the "next" link starting on this page is suckaskitty.html.. to make it work, just make it the NEXT part lowercase. (10/20).
Emotions: Suprisingly, you had quite a bit of emotion. You gave your opinion readily and in a way that really gets the point across. You're not afraid to say what you think and sometimes were pretty detailed about your family situation, what you have to do, etc. (17/20).
Extras: Rings, reviews (you might want to but a break in between each Review site; it'd look better), surveys linked, fans (but no one's linked your diary yet; maybe erase it for now and put the link in when you have some linkers) and that's it. (3/10).
Link: Yes, it's there. (5/5).
Contact: Email, guestbook, notes. (5/5).
Total: 58/100
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Favorite Entry: ??
Favorite Quote: Not available
Comments: You've only had your diary since mid-May. Add some more extras, take away links you don't need, use correct grammar more often, make font bigger, correct layout, and just keep being yourself like you're doing.
Reviewed by Kathy