marg.nora.juj
Content: The first entry I read was here and you wrote that Six Flags was really fun, etc and thats great but you didn't go beyond that You wrote a sentence or so to your friends about it, but we don't know what happened. You could have written about a few experiences and feelings you had when there that made it so much fun. Like a ride or compliment or something you saw and/or bought that really made the day something to remember. And then you go on a different topic that has nothing to do with Six Flags, so there should be a paragraph break in between each new subject so that it's easier to read and more organized.
Okay, I don't get this This diary is written by three different people? Marg and Nora AND Juj?.. Thats going to be confusing. It'll be interesting to see if it's well organized or not
The very first entry has no punctuation, etc.. It's kind of annoying. Also, the person who wrote it was speaking to the two other people sharing the diary. That's not necessary at all.. I noticed that you were making notes to friends in a lot of the entries. Those comments don't need to be there because that's what email and IM is for. And most of the entries are so short. And they're certainly not deeep. It's so surface, about their day or writing to the friends, etc. Those kinds of entries are totally pointless. You could try to put periods and commas sometimes.
This one's a little better, okay scratch that it was really boring to me. And where are the paragraph breaks? There are plenty of places where you should've put them. It's good that most titles have the name of the author but some of them are left blank. So you all should sign your name at the bottom of the page so it's always clear.
The poem in the beginning is okay. It surprised me because the writing so far is not that good. But after the poem, the entry isn't that interesting. There's so much about the day and that isn't even very detailed. I really hated when you guys mostly had conversations with each other in the diary. A diary is not for email messages. In a diary goes your deepest feelings, thoughts, ideas, and more I did not see much of that at all.
This was very long and some of it wasn't bad but you didn't make me want to read it, especially since there's no punctuation. It's not that hard to capitalize people.
Now onto newer, more current entries to see if there's any improvement. Well, this entry begins with something like "prepare yourself for a really boring entry." Don't tell us that! It won't make us want to read it. And you don't have to write "I'd like to say" or anything in front of your sentences because you already are saying that comment. You could've gone so much more in depth. Like what made you think people are stupid. What happened on that day to compel you to write that? And you all should really learn how to break up long paragraphs.
Some of the entries were so pointless and short. It had no emotions or anything to go on about what happened to make you write the statement. Like in this entry. Okay, the next entry is much better and has some emotion too. Go Marg! I think you're doing the best job. The score would be a bit higher if it was just you, but that's not the case. So I think it would be great if you were the only one writing in the diary!
This was long but I liked the poem in the beginning.(18/40).
Layout: Design by Lucky Designs and picture from HD. I like the color of the links, but now how the background color of the photo and entries change they're too different color blue's! The picture is a water drop and ripples which looks really nice. It gives the diary a peaceful feel and I like it The white box where entries are in, it looks like it's out of place so maybe there should be a fading effect or something so it looks better with the water-y picture. The profile link doesn't work though. Not sure why.
All right, the diary's been there since February something and you can't make most of entries have the same layout as you have now? I counted like 6 or 7 different layouts. Since three people work on this diary, you can make it all the same right? I must say, the one I like best is probably the one here even though links are only at the bottom and the font is great too. (16/20).
Emotions: Not much at all. But some more in the more recent entries, like here it was getting a lot better. The person wrote first about the diary saying people write what the feel at the time, I didn't get that sense.. but this time the girl did write her feelings down and that was great. I don't know who he is, but you did a good job in talking about him and the situation, the emotions you go through around him.. I would love more entries like that. (14/20).
Extras: Diaryrings, the girl's journals or webpages,... Not much at all. (5/10).
Link: Yes its a button. =) (5/5).
Contact: Guestbook, notes, email. (5/5).
Score: 63/100.
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Favorite Entry: I'm not sure.
Favorite Quote: None.
Comments: What can I say? You may disagree with this review, and that's fine but don't be rude to me or the site, especially because I spent a lot of time reviewing the diary. Anyway 63% really isn't bad for this diary.I've gotten scores like that in the beginning too and lower scores in the content area than you all, and I can honestly say I don't understand how that happened. But anyway, the layout you have now is pretty good. Keep up with the emotional stuff, because seriously I did not see that there was an abundance of it and really theres no such thing as too much emotion. And definitely let there be more depth and detail.
Reviewed By Kathy